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We are happy to introduce you to this short story series. These Short Stories are inspired by Hiroyuki Morioka's Seikai series. They take place 10 years after Jinto and Lafiel first met.

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It's almost August..
I believe I can at least post the first few pages of 18....
The work is far from complete and my mind is very far from the subject of writing .. for now...

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The first eleven pages of eighteen have been posted... The work in not complete so for the moment there will be no .doc document posted.

My free time is slowly becoming my own. I'll be able to post more and write a bit more..
However I must state that my free time is still very fluid.

Thank you for your patience.

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Ty :cat_w :cat_w

take ur time.. we (or I) can wait :rofl :rofl
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Another Eleven pages are now posted... Time still escapes me.... :|

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Still love your work man.
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Time is fleeting.. Yet I'm finding time to write a bit ...the next eleven pages will be forthcoming...

Now for a snippet....
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Lafiel sat at the outdoor table looking down towards the lagoon. Ekuryua, Risch and Scholar had made their way to the garden and Jinto was standing overlooking the lake. Sobbash was on final approach to a lake landing. Lafiel lifted her glass and took another sip. This was going to be an informative evening. Dr. Sasoum had some explaining to do and she was very interested in what the good Doctor had to say. Watching the sunlight pass through the glass she realized this was the first time since their return from Sol Eros that she had relaxed, the feeling of momentary contentment made her happy. This evening could be very stormy and a little peace before battle was all an Abh ever wished for, however this was not going to be Lafiel’s battle. But soon, very soon, she would make decisions and declarations that could start a battle of Empire shaking proportions, but that was going to be later, right now she relished the peace and contentment she was feeling.

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Time flies but as promised (although later than I wanted it) here are another eleven pages for your reading enjoyment.

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Is anybody reading this thread???
I'm still writing but at a very reduced pace..
*I see that cloning isn't quite perfected ..yet..*

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yes I'm reading it ^^
The story is very good please continue . I would like to read the ending too.
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I check back here every few days as well.
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wolf81inIL wrote:I check back here every few days as well.
Firedragon wrote:yes I'm reading it ^^
The story is very good please continue . I would like to read the ending too.
Thank You..
The work progresses slowly.. as for an ending, do you mean this chapter, or the short story set?

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I mean that I would like to read not only the ending of the chapter; I would like to read the complete story set. ^^
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Greetings...
The story does progress although much more slowly than I would like.. :banghead
Hopefully another week or so and it'll will be done..

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Diaho wrote:Greetings...
The story does progress although much more slowly than I would like.. :banghead
Hopefully another week or so and it'll will be done..
lol whenever it gets done is cool man ^^

your works probably some of the best fanfiction on the net, (in my opinion), so its well worth the wait :D
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Eighteen is posted...the word doc will be done shortly. Enjoy. :amismiling

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Eighteen is the end of one saga. For those of you who haven't read it. I'll not spoil it.
Nineteen will start a different saga and a different style of writing for me.
I hope you'll enjoy it and it should let me be more productive.
I'm still having trouble with the Word Document for Eighteen.
It's a software issue and I should have it straighten out shortly.

Thank you.

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Good as always man.

One suggestion. Perhaps it would be easier to break them off into smaller chunks? You're earlier, ummm chapters I guess, seem much shorter. I guess creativity grows though.

I look forward to the next section.
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wolf81inIL wrote:Good as always man.

One suggestion. Perhaps it would be easier to break them off into smaller chunks? You're earlier, ummm chapters I guess, seem much shorter. I guess creativity grows though.

I look forward to the next section.
*Nods*
Eighteen should have been in two parts and in a way it was but I posted it as one large document.
From nineteen on they should be about twenty to thirty five pages in length.
It'll be easier for the reader and easier for me to proof and post.
[BB coding seventy plus pages is a pain]

Creativity does grow.
I stopped eighteen short.
It could have been another twenty pages but some of that material will show up later as flash backs.

Nineteen is about ten pages so far

I've figured out the .doc problem for eighteen. I'll post it later today.

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I have not read chapter 18 yet (just downloaded it). But if you would like I could be a beta reader for you to help with the spelling and things like that (or at least attempt) though I must agree your story IS among the best fanfiction I have seen on the net and I think I have read at least 300+ of them and out of all of them this one and one other I have enjoyed the most and think is best written. I will post again once I have read chapter 18.
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A Snippet of Nineteen...

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Planetary Life

The morning started crisp and cool, by noon it was pleasant, as the sunset approached a thin layer of high clouds started to form from the southwest. It was the evening of the third celebration of the planets attunement. Plakia, who was four and had enough fingers to show you, was helping Dawn who was almost three up the path towards Seelnay and Nasse’s residence. Right before Dawn was born Seelnay had convinced Nasse and her family to move to Shahrazad. Seelnay’s delivery was anything but normal; Dawn was not willing to enter this new world readily. After thirty hours of non-stop labor she arrived shortly after dawn on the last day of the harvest moon. Seelnay, who had a head full of boy’s names till the minute she saw her, decided if dawn is when she arrived then Dawn is what she’ll be named.

“Look at you two! What a mess you are.” Seelnay said as the girls entered the residence. “We need to get you cleaned up for the ceremony tonight.” Seelnay called to Nasse who took Plakia, then she and Dawn set about the daunting task of getting a three old cleaned up for an important event. Finally, Dawn was presentable; she sat in a pale yellow sundress and waited for Plakia to come down the hall. Seelnay fixed her hair while keeping one eye on Dawn. I’ve got a surprise for you if you’re a good girl.” Seelnay said as she fixed the last bit of her outfit. “Do you have any idea of what it might be?”

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In return I'd like to call you Jinto."


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Nineteen is completed and in final proofing.

There are somethings I'd like to discuss before it's posted.
Starting with Nineteen and continuing on from there the Empire will no longer be discussed in as much detail as previously chapters have done.
Lafiel has made a choice and that choice has left her in a worse position than Jinto is, that position is described in the last of eighteen and expanded upon in nineteen.

From here on we'll also look at things through the eyes of others, and those of Jinto and Lafiel as well.
You'll get a better understanding of how living on a planet affects not only the Abh, who never have had any interest in planets, but those who have lived on planets before.
We'll explore how Shahrazad has changed and how those upon it's surface now deal with Planetary Life.

I hope you'll enjoy this next series...

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It seems there no time in day get things finish.
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lymhfeubdach wrote:It seems there no time in day get things finish.
Greetings... If you wish you could start an intro thread.... :cat_w:

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Twenty is progressing, not at a speed I'm happy with but it is progressing.. Snippet later :amismiling:

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Saio’s efforts at walking left Samson and I making some drastic changes in the placement of things in this cottage. First off I’ve moved anything, which could be sampled by mouth, to a place of safety. Then anything that was easily movable was placed in a room that is off limits to Miss Saio. I’m standing in the kitchen cleaning up after breakfast. Saio is along side my right leg, standing and holding tight to my slacks. Her face bears the example of her sampling; I lean over, take a wet cloth and find her smiling face. My nose has also detected that Saio needs a change of scenery. We make our way to her room and after a visit to the changing table she is back at my side while I finish the dishes.

Samson and Saio bonded early on; I remember one evening right after the hover car was finished. I had returned from the Village after a check up and I found both of them asleep on the floor. Saio was curled up on Samson’s chest the two of them were oblivious to anything that was happening around them. I captured the image and covered them up. Samson’s nose woke him to not only the smell of dinner but Saio had also announced that she needed changing. I heard their stirring and removed Saio from Samson’s chest, changed her and placed her in the high chair at the table. We had an interesting dinner that night, half way through it I showed Samson the image I had captured and he spent the rest of the evening chuckling over it. That image now sits on his desk, as a constant reminder of how much Saio and I need him.

There is one other thing I’ve grown to accept, even though I’m older than Samson is, I’m Abh. I’ll live to be around two hundred years of age or older. That means not only will I outlive Samson I’ll probably outlive Saio as well. Samson and I have discussed this subject at length when the time comes Saio and I will discuss it too. I hope she’ll still love me even though I’ll not change in physical appearance while she’ll grow old and change in appearance. I understand why Abh’s never get into long term relationships with non Abh’s, however for the first time in my life, I really care about Samson and Saio and I’ll be here for them for the rest of their lives.

Saio released my leg and stood on her own, her little hands reaching for mine. With wet fingers I reached for her and brought her to my chest, she buried her head and gurgled, one moment later she was asleep. I took her to her room and placed her in her bed. Making sure she was comfortable I returned to the kitchen and finished my cleaning.

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In return I'd like to call you Jinto."


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When I tried to download chapter 19 to read it tells me Unable to deliver file.
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Jinto wrote:When I tried to download chapter 19 to read it tells me Unable to deliver file.
Darn software foibles...:banghead
It did the same for me. It affected 18 too. Try it now, it should work :amismiling

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It is working now. thank you now I can read it after work :)
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Jinto wrote:It is working now. thank you now I can read it after work :)
Good....Thanks for the feedback..

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I've had to take sometime for myself.. there are issues in my life that need to be resolved before I continue writing.
So Chapter 20 is on hold, indefinitely. I'm not sure how long things will take to sort out on this end, but.. for the moment the Short Story is taking a vacation.

That is all..

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